Alyssa Marsellos
1. In the essay the argument that is being made is that although people may not be a fan of Shakespeare, they cannot escape the fact that he is very present in our modern society. Alyssa support’s this argument by using a very effective quote that I’ve never seen before that instantly starts the essay with a bang and hooks the reader. The quote is used to describe all the modern day sayings that people say. The funny part is that many people don’t even know that they are saying quotes and sayings that came from Shakespeare in his plays. In addition, she describes the similarities between the beloved child favorite movie Lion King and the famous tragedy of Hamlet. This was a very effective point in the essay because it goes along with her overall point that even though you may have never picked up a book and read a play from Shakespeare does not mean that have never been exposed to his literature.
2. I think the essay was very well written and I liked how the essay was geared towards you. It’s as if the writer was writing directly to you but it still had a general touch to it. I think that the writer should continue by using more modern day examples to show that even though Shakespeare is not physically present in our lives, he continues to live on through many different forms of literature. From reading the end of the essay I know that the next main point will be She’s the Man which also comes from Shakespeare. Also maybe to include West Side Story would be a great way to tie in how prevalent Shakespeare is in modern day culture. His plays are still conducted worldwide and there is still a huge fan base that support and love Shakespeare. Overall, very well done and the essay looks great!
Tori Johnston
1. In this essay Tori talks about the magazine, The Water Skier, which is a magazine that talks about the various types of skiing. It’s very clear from the essay that the magazine would not be as successful if it did not include visuals. Since this magazine highlights all of the forms of skiing there needs to be visuals to wow the reader. The argument that is being is that the magazine’s visuals help aid the reader making it more enjoyable because they are able to gain a lot of information on how to do certain tricks and body positions by just looking at the pictures.
2. This essay is looking very good. The only thing that I would say to add is when it is talking about slalom skiing is to describe what it is. As a skier, I know what it is but to the general population I don’t think they do. Just a small short description would suffice. The author is going in a great direction by offering more examples and maybe including how these pictures provide safety in that they cause fewer accidents for people who want to try the tricks in the future. This essay is great, keep up the good work.
David Breeding
1. The essay talks about how vital photography is for the sport of wakeboarding. The main argument in the essay states how important it is to get the right photo shot of people wakeboarding. The magazine is very successful because each issue must be aided by visuals of the sport to attract people’s interests. It is supported by the various examples throughout the essay explaining how important the visuals are to the magazine. Because the visuals are successful many people by the issue allowing the magazine to company to be very successful. For this reason the magazine company goes through great lengths by using expensive photo shots, such as helicopter shots, to get the best possible shot.
2. This essay was very interesting because it talks about a sport that is filled with fun and adrenaline. Reading it only furthered my desire to one day wakeboard. I liked the essay a lot and you are going in a great direction. The only thing that I could maybe add is that towards the end the essay states how the sport is starting to become more international, maybe write some of that and include how Transworld Wakeboarding influenced international competitiveness. Maybe the magazine being sold in other countries gained the sport support? Keep it up, this essay is going to be great.
1. In the essay the argument that is being made is that although people may not be a fan of Shakespeare, they cannot escape the fact that he is very present in our modern society. Alyssa support’s this argument by using a very effective quote that I’ve never seen before that instantly starts the essay with a bang and hooks the reader. The quote is used to describe all the modern day sayings that people say. The funny part is that many people don’t even know that they are saying quotes and sayings that came from Shakespeare in his plays. In addition, she describes the similarities between the beloved child favorite movie Lion King and the famous tragedy of Hamlet. This was a very effective point in the essay because it goes along with her overall point that even though you may have never picked up a book and read a play from Shakespeare does not mean that have never been exposed to his literature.
2. I think the essay was very well written and I liked how the essay was geared towards you. It’s as if the writer was writing directly to you but it still had a general touch to it. I think that the writer should continue by using more modern day examples to show that even though Shakespeare is not physically present in our lives, he continues to live on through many different forms of literature. From reading the end of the essay I know that the next main point will be She’s the Man which also comes from Shakespeare. Also maybe to include West Side Story would be a great way to tie in how prevalent Shakespeare is in modern day culture. His plays are still conducted worldwide and there is still a huge fan base that support and love Shakespeare. Overall, very well done and the essay looks great!
Tori Johnston
1. In this essay Tori talks about the magazine, The Water Skier, which is a magazine that talks about the various types of skiing. It’s very clear from the essay that the magazine would not be as successful if it did not include visuals. Since this magazine highlights all of the forms of skiing there needs to be visuals to wow the reader. The argument that is being is that the magazine’s visuals help aid the reader making it more enjoyable because they are able to gain a lot of information on how to do certain tricks and body positions by just looking at the pictures.
2. This essay is looking very good. The only thing that I would say to add is when it is talking about slalom skiing is to describe what it is. As a skier, I know what it is but to the general population I don’t think they do. Just a small short description would suffice. The author is going in a great direction by offering more examples and maybe including how these pictures provide safety in that they cause fewer accidents for people who want to try the tricks in the future. This essay is great, keep up the good work.
David Breeding
1. The essay talks about how vital photography is for the sport of wakeboarding. The main argument in the essay states how important it is to get the right photo shot of people wakeboarding. The magazine is very successful because each issue must be aided by visuals of the sport to attract people’s interests. It is supported by the various examples throughout the essay explaining how important the visuals are to the magazine. Because the visuals are successful many people by the issue allowing the magazine to company to be very successful. For this reason the magazine company goes through great lengths by using expensive photo shots, such as helicopter shots, to get the best possible shot.
2. This essay was very interesting because it talks about a sport that is filled with fun and adrenaline. Reading it only furthered my desire to one day wakeboard. I liked the essay a lot and you are going in a great direction. The only thing that I could maybe add is that towards the end the essay states how the sport is starting to become more international, maybe write some of that and include how Transworld Wakeboarding influenced international competitiveness. Maybe the magazine being sold in other countries gained the sport support? Keep it up, this essay is going to be great.
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